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    dots Submission Name: Fighting to Keep Youdots
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    Author: poetry chica
    ASL Info:    17/f/usa
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 93/98/34
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/You left me
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       idk i was just thinkin of what would happen if i lost the one i love


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    dotsFighting to Keep Youdots
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    don't say i didn't fight
    to keep you here
    i held you close
    and kept you near

    i tried to be what you needed
    but i guess i wasn't enough
    i should move on i guess
    try to be tough

    but i loved you so much
    and wasn't worth your time
    i'll love you forever
    even if you're not mine

    if you're happy alone
    then i guess we weren't meant to be
    i just fade into darkness
    and you'll be forever without me

    but you'll still be in my mind
    and in my heart
    you're the first person i think of
    right from the start

    so i'll learn to live alone
    and maybe i'll find someone new
    but it won't be the same
    in my mind first place will always belong
    to you




    Submitted on 2005-11-23 20:46:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i was suprised to read that you were just wondering what it would be like if you lost someone, cause at first i thought this was real, that is how emotionally powerful it is, it was really came off as genuinely real uncut emotion. it was really quiet but that was what was good about it, it was like quiet emotion not loud sobbing or anger, just raw i guess. this was really good
    | Posted on 2005-11-23 00:00:00 | by Metal Heart74 | [ Reply to This ]


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