Really good, very descriptive..I can relate to this like hell..Except I would dedicate it to my entire family..They make me feel like [censored]..and they don't know that I cut..And it hurts to know that i've been doing for 7 years and the only who is catching on is my brother, and he is making fun of me for it..And the people who cause this pain, are ussually blind as to who is causing it, thats normal..been there..But its best that way..Anywho this was really nice, the flow just made me want to keep reading..The pain was expressed thoroughly the entire way through..made reading it all worth the while..So keep up the great work, and i'm hoping that your mother will grow to accept and understand you more..lovely piece..take care
I think you did an excellant job expressing your feelings, anger, pain , all very vivid, almost brutal, but in a good way you kno? i think its a very strong, emotional poem and i for one am adding it to my favorites. Also, i can definately relate, I cut too, but , though we have that in common, my parents just dont care that i do it, they ignore it and put me on medications, so i suppose i can understand some of what you feel, but i wish i could understand it entirely, definately a peice to ponder.
wow so very true... my parents don't believe in depression and they say cutting is a stupid thing to do...so when i cut myself they didn't even realise that i am doing it which is in a good thing but also a bad thing...anywayz i couldn't c anything wrong with this poem it flowed well and had good ryhming...wonderful piece ++My Pain++
You used a great expressive plot in this poem. It was very emotional and heart-felt. I can relate, only I don't cut, but I lock myself in my room and avoid my parents because everytime I'm around them they have something bad to say it seems. And I'll yell back and get in trouble. I don't want that, so I avoid it, and then I get in trouble for avoiding them...*sigh* So very complicated, lol. Anyway, good write.
One more of these poems that I really hope isn't from true experience...not saying it's not great just don't want anyone to really feel that way ...ya know??? It is really good though...expressing the pain vividly and gets your point across