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    dots Submission Name: Cave Kiddots
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    Author: xmangaXfreakx
    ASL Info:    13/f/IL
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 31/30/22
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 668
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    Bytes: 604



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       This is about my old best friend from first grade Harry. luv yew harry lol i nvr 4got u.but i hate you. i hate u for leaving. im sorry


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    dotsCave Kiddots
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    He's back.
    7 years gone by.
    I doubt he even remembers me.
    He was so happy back then.
    Not anymore.
    His parents are dead.

    I don't want to be friends with him.
    Not again.
    He scares me now.
    Just trudging around,
    eyes sunk deep into his head.
    Now he's Cave Kid.

    I'm trying to convince myself he's not real.
    That he never was.
    But a voice in my head knows.
    It knows he was there.

    I remember when I pushed him off the slide.
    He pushed me back.




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