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Submission Name: out of memory dots

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Author:	namesdontmatter
Elite Ratio:	3.06 - 62/89/29
Words:	105

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
Total Views:	736
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
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Description:
hahahahahahahaha this is funny to me for special reasons.

out of memory dots

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click backspace
more useless excuses about why i didnt call
hit delete
more regreted letters about how i feel
how do i feel some may ask?
with my heart and hands like everyone else
duh
one, two, three here goes
do you miss me
wait im too afraid of the answer
ok never mind lets have it
ready set stop dont go
hit exclamation point twice
maybe that will show i meant it
or maybe i didnt
but youll never have to know
hit power
im done with this
call me if youre sorry
dont if youre expecting my apology
its in the recycle bin

Submitted on 2005-11-23 22:19:46 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Oh is this good
It was extremely creative
It seems a lot of people are using the computer as a way to say im sorry or I Love You
I hope they realize it will never match the emotion of hearing those words in person
Again
Great Write!
Take Care
Ron
| Posted on 2005-11-26 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  This is cleverly and smoothly done. This is a real metaphor for many of us typing as we do our poetry.

I like the feel and flow. The points are clear.

It grabs you with the first line and takes the reader on a fun ride.

Very nice!
Chrystine
| Posted on 2005-11-24 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]
  This was again unique and very ammusing. I like the whole plot of it...deception and miscommunications...and labeling it serious adding to the humor. talking to people is something alot of people wouldn't write about but you captured it well...I agree with toyys the format could have been a bit better. other than that great write. keep writing
peace
| Posted on 2005-11-24 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
  creative and very amusing.i personally dont do the whole communicate or chat online.i dont care 4 half the people around me,much less metting someone online,

the format could be improved but the creative process behind this=methophours and correlations=done nicely

thanks 4 sharring

toyysruss
| Posted on 2005-11-23 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]

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