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    dots Submission Name: Me And Youdots
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    Author: tinkerbellsas
    ASL Info:    22/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 67/66/32
    Words: 233
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 644
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsMe And Youdots
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    People tell me your not the one
    That you're just havin fun
    But when I'm with you nothing matters
    All those words fade away

    I don't care what any one has to say
    I know this is the way
    What do they know about our love
    Their just jealous of what we have
    A love so strong and true
    Everyone wishes they were me and you

    My friends all want more for me
    But there's something they don't see
    You're the most I could ever dream
    You're the only thing I want

    I don't care what anyone has to say
    I know this is the way
    What do they know about our love
    Their just jealous of what we have
    A love so strong and true
    Everyone wishes they were me and you

    They don't see us alone
    They don't know the way you love me
    When I look into your eyes
    You tell me all I need to know
    You tell me you truly love me
    Just by the way you look at me
    I need you with me forever
    Everyone's just to blind to see

    I don't care what anyone has to say
    I know this is the way
    What do they know about our love
    Their just jealous of what we have
    A love so strong and true
    Everyone wishes they were me and you




    Submitted on 2005-11-23 22:20:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a very sweet poem, I'm glad I had the chance to read it. The structure was very strong and the words flowed smoothly. Keep it up!
    | Posted on 2005-11-23 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]


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