Description: hmm i dunno how i feel about this one. how bout you tell me how you like it?
the risk isnt worth it -------------------------------------------
is the real reason youre here to get coffee
because i think you have that at home
or are you here to see me
because id rather be alone
the risk is almost never worth it
and i dont deserve to hurt like this
and i dont want to risk it ever again
its not that i dont like you
or that i hate the world overall
its just that i jumped once
and almost collapsed during the fall
i gave it all
and ended up emptyhearted
so now excuse the hesitation
but playing with fire has already got me burned
I so understand! [censored], i can't tell you anything i haven't already. I feel like you and i are a lot alike, and the real difference is our style. There is somethign so amazing about how you put thigns as to the way i read them...sheer brilliance and pure talent.
I like this write Its deep and definately has a message When we are hurt in a relationship there is a memory of that relationship that stays with us If we could only look deep at that memory we could find what we learned from it and use that information to carry us into another relationship Great Write Take Care Ron
are you a waitress? u get youre point across well.kinda goes from poetic to rant=this is not a bad thing to me.it is very painfull to "jump".the scar left making the next one=well,skiddish about doing so again is normal.you WILL jump again though.
beggining was nice,some of the ryme was good. format and consistency might need some work=all my writes do lol.
this is a pretty decent piece. the general sentiment seems slightly... overdone, in the sense that "boulevard of broken dreams" is overplayed... ya know? the grammer is pretty lax, like basically you don't use a single apostrophe ['], so that detracts from the overall picture slightly... but honestly, it has a very sincere, pleading tone, and i kinda like it.
Submission Name: the risk isnt worth it
