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    dots Submission Name: I'll Love You Moredots

    Author: tinkerbellsas
    ASL Info:    22/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 67/66/32
    Words: 275
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsI'll Love You Moredots

    I'd do anything for you
    The stars aren't too far
    I'd fly to the moon and back
    Just to have you hold me
    I think of you and cry
    Wishing you were mine
    I'd give you everything I could
    I'd bring down the sun for you

    When I see you I melt
    I hear your voice and I tremble
    You look at me
    I can barely stand
    I see forever in your eyes
    If only you could look at me
    And feel the way I feel
    You'd long to hold me too

    Ask me anything you wish
    I'll do all that you want
    If you tell me to leave ... I'll run away
    If you tell me to jump ... I'll touch the sky
    If you want me to be loud ... I'll scream
    If you want me to be quiet ... I'll whisper
    If you asked me to cry ... I could
    If you asked me to die ... I would

    But as time goes by
    You love her more and more
    To be her I would give my soul
    I see you look at her
    I see you love her
    I envy her in every way
    Beauty, security and all she has
    Most of all the love you give

    She doesn't love you the way I would
    Let her go, leave her behind
    Give me a chance to show you how
    To love the way it should be
    Love isn't one way, so don't love her
    While she's useing you
    She'll only hurt you in the end
    But, I promise i'll be there to pick up the pieces

    Submitted on 2005-11-23 22:38:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem is very emotional and filled with love for him and a longing just to be with him a great write and I lovee every part of this poemall you feelings and heart is felt in this poem and I also understand what it is like to love someone that does not return that lovve and it is very difficult to deal with but with a heart like yours love will find it's way to you .
    | Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by LadyMustang | [ Reply to This ]
      Aww, this is so emotional, it makes me want to cry. It's hard when you love someone so much, but they're with someone else. I'm going through the same thing. It hurts, really, really bad. I'm adding this to my favorite's list, I can sincerely relate big time! As for structure, the words are wonderful and I can't find much bad or negative to say about your poem. It was very good and I hope to see more from you!
    | Posted on 2005-11-23 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]

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