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Author: Ashleigh Mari
ASL Info:    16/ F/ IN
Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 21 /64 /12
Words: 132
Class/Type: Poetry /Broken
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August 3, 2005


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If one would travel, to decode the secrets that I hide
Starting with my heart, and ending with my mind

A strange, forgotten desert, could smother a lingering breath
Layed to rest next to decay, fighting the grasp of death

The desert in my body, is the result of broken trust
Sheilded by lies and hope, then left bleeding in the dust

Soft and slow, in the faded light, murmured whispers resound
Kept awake by fear, waiting to be found

Silent screams, only I can hear, left alone to hurt in glory
Crying inside, but living still, though insecure of what's left for me

So I crawl into myself, I comfort me, as my baby
Is killed, the innocence is gone, maybe blood could save me




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  i'm such an idiot but i need to get my comments up... omg... i'm such a fake... lol. but, i can't get on too much anymore so i'm going to post this same comment about 500 times to get it back up... i'm a loser... my mom banned me from the net because she's a total [censored] and got mad, blamed me for viruses... whatever... anyways...

CAHi'm such an idiot but i need to get my comments up... omg... i'm such a fake... lol. but, i can't get on too much anymore so i'm going to post this same comment about 500 times to get it back up... i'm a loser... my mom banned me from the net because she's a total [censored] and got mad, blamed me for viruses... whatever... anyways...

CAH
| Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by bloody_carebear | [ Reply to This ]
  i'm such an idiot but i need to get my comments up... omg... i'm such a fake... lol. but, i can't get on too much anymore so i'm going to post this same comment about 500 times to get it back up... i'm a loser... my mom banned me from the net because she's a total [censored] and got mad, blamed me for viruses... whatever... anyways...

CAHi'm such an idiot but i need to get my comments up... omg... i'm such a fake... lol. but, i can't get on too much anymore so i'm going to post this same comment about 500 times to get it back up... i'm a loser... my mom banned me from the net because she's a total [censored] and got mad, blamed me for viruses... whatever... anyways...

CAH
| Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by bloody_carebear | [ Reply to This ]
  i'm such an idiot but i need to get my comments up... omg... i'm such a fake... lol. but, i can't get on too much anymore so i'm going to post this same comment about 500 times to get it back up... i'm a loser... my mom banned me from the net because she's a total [censored] and got mad, blamed me for viruses... whatever... anyways...

CAHi'm such an idiot but i need to get my comments up... omg... i'm such a fake... lol. but, i can't get on too much anymore so i'm going to post this same comment about 500 times to get it back up... i'm a loser... my mom banned me from the net because she's a total [censored] and got mad, blamed me for viruses... whatever... anyways...

CAH
| Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by bloody_carebear | [ Reply to This ]
  i'm such an idiot but i need to get my comments up... omg... i'm such a fake... lol. but, i can't get on too much anymore so i'm going to post this same comment about 500 times to get it back up... i'm a loser... my mom banned me from the net because she's a total [censored] and got mad, blamed me for viruses... whatever... anyways...

CAHi'm such an idiot but i need to get my comments up... omg... i'm such a fake... lol. but, i can't get on too much anymore so i'm going to post this same comment about 500 times to get it back up... i'm a loser... my mom banned me from the net because she's a total [censored] and got mad, blamed me for viruses... whatever... anyways...

CAH
| Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by bloody_carebear | [ Reply to This ]
  i'm such an idiot but i need to get my comments up... omg... i'm such a fake... lol. but, i can't get on too much anymore so i'm going to post this same comment about 500 times to get it back up... i'm a loser... my mom banned me from the net because she's a total [censored] and got mad, blamed me for viruses... whatever... anyways...

CAHi'm such an idiot but i need to get my comments up... omg... i'm such a fake... lol. but, i can't get on too much anymore so i'm going to post this same comment about 500 times to get it back up... i'm a loser... my mom banned me from the net because she's a total [censored] and got mad, blamed me for viruses... whatever... anyways...

CAH
| Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by bloody_carebear | [ Reply to This ]


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