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Innocence Is Gone


Author: Ashleigh Mari
ASL Info:    16/ F/ IN
Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 21 /64 /12
Words: 186
Class/Type: Poetry /Political
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August 4, 2005


Innocence Is Gone



Imagine a face that you recognize
With two round green eyes

A smile that lights up a darkened heart
A laugh so precious it could tear you apart

Ten fingers that want to play
Ten toes come out on sunny days

Blonde hair barely in view
A baby who look just like you

Can your hands sign the papers? Can you hand them the money? Can your heart ever recover? Can you ever be okay?

Look at my face
And try to convince me you're right
When your hands are bloody
And you just stole the beginning of life

No, you didn't bleach and hang your child
You didn't force yourself down the stairs
You didn't do it by your own hand
But you still didn't try to care

That hook... vaccuum... the sterilization
It took that life away
A Baby whose only crime
Is choosing the mother who would never change

When you see those eyes and that hair
And you're trying to be strong
Know that you killed your flesh
And that innocence is gone




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  i'm such an idiot but i need to get my comments up... omg... i'm such a fake... lol. but, i can't get on too much anymore so i'm going to post this same comment about 500 times to get it back up... i'm a loser... my mom banned me from the net because she's a total [censored] and got mad, blamed me for viruses... whatever... anyways...

CAH
| Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by bloody_carebear | [ Reply to This ]
  i'm such an idiot but i need to get my comments up... omg... i'm such a fake... lol. but, i can't get on too much anymore so i'm going to post this same comment about 500 times to get it back up... i'm a loser... my mom banned me from the net because she's a total [censored] and got mad, blamed me for viruses... whatever... anyways...

CAH
| Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by bloody_carebear | [ Reply to This ]
  i'm such an idiot but i need to get my comments up... omg... i'm such a fake... lol. but, i can't get on too much anymore so i'm going to post this same comment about 500 times to get it back up... i'm a loser... my mom banned me from the net because she's a total [censored] and got mad, blamed me for viruses... whatever... anyways...

CAH
| Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by bloody_carebear | [ Reply to This ]
  i'm such an idiot but i need to get my comments up... omg... i'm such a fake... lol. but, i can't get on too much anymore so i'm going to post this same comment about 500 times to get it back up... i'm a loser... my mom banned me from the net because she's a total [censored] and got mad, blamed me for viruses... whatever... anyways...

CAH
| Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by bloody_carebear | [ Reply to This ]
  i'm such an idiot but i need to get my comments up... omg... i'm such a fake... lol. but, i can't get on too much anymore so i'm going to post this same comment about 500 times to get it back up... i'm a loser... my mom banned me from the net because she's a total [censored] and got mad, blamed me for viruses... whatever... anyways...

CAH
| Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by bloody_carebear | [ Reply to This ]
  I agree with jeffiner on this one. It is a very controversial message. It's strong and provacative. But I have a question. What if your parents forced you to have an abortion. Is your innocence gone then?
| Posted on 2005-11-24 00:00:00 | by Jussy | [ Reply to This ]
  a very controversial message. i personally am pro-choice and believe people have the right to make their own decisions. obviously you are not. its well written, and i really enjoyed it. the imagery was fantastic in the first 4 stanzas.. i find it somewhat went downhill from there though.


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| Posted on 2005-11-24 00:00:00 | by jeffiner | [ Reply to This ]


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