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    dots Submission Name: Love Abusedots
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    Author: Jussy
    ASL Info:    21 ...guy....waterworld
    Elite Ratio:    4.47 - 66/64/21
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 854
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 413



    Description:
       This piece is about that lover that constantly abuses and never thinks twice. But you always end up loyal to them no matter how they treat you. That's part of love


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    dotsLove Abusedots
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    You've shown me you loved me
    by hurting me again.
    I'll be your punching bag, I'll be your sin

    You've shown me you loved me
    by ripping me apart.
    You've lost all reason, but hitting me's a good
    start.

    You've shown me you loved me
    by apoligizing sincerely,
    Though you hurt me always, I love you dearly.




    Submitted on 2005-11-24 01:41:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "Though you hurt me always, I love you dearly"

    I know too well what you mean. You said it perfectly though. I would make this comment better, but all of my comments sound the same and I'm getting sick of it. I've been stuck in "comment hell" (as someone once called it) for months now. Oh well. I didn't intend to comment at all, but I wanted you to know how much I love it. You have a lot of talent. Beautifully done

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      Will you ever stop, you are (and I'm being sincere) one of the best poets on here, you're entries are seriously worth reading, and yeah I'm "Mos-def" gonna stalk you, because I love your work...how old are you?
    | Posted on 2005-11-25 00:00:00 | by vanhokinshtyl | [ Reply to This ]
      i really liiked this poem it's so true about how people can be abusive to others but we always stay true to them...yea good write
    siara
    | Posted on 2005-11-24 00:00:00 | by poetry chica | [ Reply to This ]
      I have always liked the triplet rhyming. Nice job on that. "I love thee dearly" I didn't much like it. Because the use of the word "thee" to me is far too romantic for a poem about abuse. Anyways good write.
    | Posted on 2005-11-24 00:00:00 | by St. Agatha | [ Reply to This ]


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