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    dots Submission Name: Simple Complicationdots

    Author: Chicool2
    ASL Info:    17/f/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 266/260/60
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       I don't know what it means, but I think it's pretty good.
    Tell me what you think...?

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    dotsSimple Complicationdots

    A dark and dreary road lies before thee
    Encrusted with hatred and scorn
    There is a faint light in the crack
    But we cannot shun order in time
    It meets at an intersecting heart
    With no color to decipher a meaning
    Love nor hate, I despise the words
    Repition overcomes their true meaning
    We are left with nothing but a phrase
    There is no 'crush' now
    Only true feelings from an elegant level
    Not by size or strength
    But by integrity, I shall not be diffused
    Mingling emotions demonstrate themselevs
    Tint drained from the soul
    Simple Complication?
    But that smile, not only
    But also extraordinary features intrigue me

    Submitted on 2005-11-24 09:59:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmm.. I am getting somewhat of this... maybe alittle bit has to do with NOT your boyfriend.. Another guy... hint hint...
    I mean yeah he is gorgeouS! hun I don't know what I would do in your shoes.. Obviously your boyfriend.. hmmm you really don't talk much about him... I guess he isn't that special... well he is but not in a way you think...
    But this always seems to happen Amy.. Whatever you choose to do... Yikes... Seems like DRAMA is gonna be going on...lol
    Anyways this poem is really good. One of the best ones you ever wrote.
    Also it has very good choice in vocabulary...
    lol...Sometimes confusing.. But I am just guessing with everything going on it sounds like something that has to do with ABOVE.

    Lov ya
    Keep Writing
    | Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      Simple Complication is a very very good title for this peice it is almost as complicated as love truly is and definitly as simply put together as love should be lol I like how you used quick changes in your imagery to create a complex feel but kept the lines and language simple enough to provide an illusion of being a easy read lol I actually do like tis piece by the way i hope i dont sound like an a$$hole LOl
    | Posted on 2005-11-24 00:00:00 | by Atrip187 | [ Reply to This ]

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