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    dots Submission Name: Licentious mandots
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    Author: Chicool2
    ASL Info:    17/f/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 266/260/60
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       Once again, I don't know what it means, do you think you could tell me? I think it's fairly interesting though


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    dotsLicentious mandots
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    A young woman
    A young man, the man is licentious in thought
    His emotions for the woman run dry
    And are replaced by urges
    No feelings for her
    But simple urges he cannot discern
    He escapes his mind so he will not harm the woman
    The young woman,
    her mind is similarily vague to transluscence
    It lets in a bit of light to let her mind wander
    Of the young man
    And then she cannot concentrate
    For he doesn't have true feelings for her
    And a tear slips from her eye
    And she vows never to remininisce
    Of the young man nor his immmaturity again




    Submitted on 2005-11-24 10:01:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Amy first the title.. The first word.. Wtf I didn't know what that meant. I had to look it up. Why do you put big words for titles. Make them simple.
    Anyways this is pretty sad in a way... but strange because some reason I think your writings somehow go into your life. But not completely. You make it sound entirely differant but it seems the same. Maybe I am just thinking differantly. Maybe I am. Maybe I am thinking the same.

    But Who Knows.
    Another great
    and
    Strange write
    But GOOD

    Love it
    Stephanie
    | Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      Great write
    To me it describes a male who had other woman in his life and grew tired of living his life only for the person he loved
    Its really sad
    Because the emotion I get from this write tells me the first woman was his soulmate
    Great Write
    Take Care
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance take a look at some of my poetry and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-11-26 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      What does it meanů I don't know.

    I do follow the flow and like the images of feelings as emotions and urges as lust.

    It takes us into the emptiness of life. It doesn't need to mean anything. It is OK to be simply a snapshot of what is, kind of like a vacation picture that you share with friends.

    For what it is or is not worth, you might look at the term young man in the last line. You established a sense of age in the opening. I am not certain that it adds anything in the last line.

    I like it. Thanks for sharing it.

    Chrystine
    | Posted on 2005-11-24 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]


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