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    dots Submission Name: Dangerous Thing Called Lovedots
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    Author: Roberto Santos
    ASL Info:    18/Male/India
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 118/159/75
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsDangerous Thing Called Lovedots
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    Love is a feeling so spotless and pure
    That it's the one feeling I've never had to endure.
    Love is considered by many as a gain
    But you can never get it without the pain.
    There's so much hate in this wild world
    That love's flag needs to be unfurled.
    Matters of this complicated emotion
    Is so great you feel engulfed by an ocean.
    I never use this word any random way
    I never use it to explain my feelings away.
    This sweet poison I have never tasted
    On me the words of love are wasted.
    It is a dangerous thing to feel this way
    To fall in love is to give your freedom away.




    Submitted on 2005-11-24 10:15:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think this is a great poem! It's really incredible and beautiful! It struck me so hard.
    I like how you were able to write about it so well. I mean, it's not easy to write about that topic.
    I like the flow... and I also like how you made every pair of lines rhyme at the ends.

    "Love is considered by many as a gain
    But you can never get it without the pain."

    ^I totally agree with that part. I'm sure a lot of others would, too.

    Keep it up!

    -Shadow
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by Lavender | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is a lovely poem. It is a great point of view on the subject also. I have never seen it written from this point of view. I think it has a great flow from beginning to end. I like it thanks for the read.

    Mikki
    | Posted on 2005-11-25 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem strikes me as TOTALLY INCREDIBLE.
    I mean it's a great point of view. Nobody really writes about it from that side. Never experiencing it can have it's ups and downs. Good write.
    | Posted on 2005-11-24 00:00:00 | by BenevolantWords | [ Reply to This ]
      INTERESTING POINT OF VEIW. AND WHATS EVEN MORE INTERESTING IS YOUR CLEAR AND BOLD ERESSION OF EMOTIONS YOU'VE NEVER FELT. Hmm... THIS POEM MAKES ME FEEL LIKE THE WRITER HAS KNOWN LOVE AND MAYBE HAS NOT REALIZED IT OR EXCEPTED IT. THE LINE "ON ME THE WORDS OF LOVE ARE WASTED" DESCRIBE THE LOVING WHO ARE UNLOVED.
    GREAT JOB

    LLCOLLINS
    | Posted on 2005-11-24 00:00:00 | by L.L.COLLINS | [ Reply to This ]


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