I know how you feel about wanting. And it's good that you wrote something that i as a reader can relate to. But i think you could make it alittle bit better. Maket he words more powerful to show more emotion. Other than that it was good. Maybe you should check out my poem Neva its kinda like a vent.
i liked how with every line I was like: That's me, that's me. I think most people could relate to these feelings. I think you can make it better. For example, you can make each feeling into a stanza. To show more emotions. It's just what i think. I have a poem: The war of emotions, hopefully you can check it out.