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    dots Submission Name: Untitleddots

    Author: tinkerbellsas
    ASL Info:    22/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 67/66/32
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    We've all heard the stories a million times
    A pair of star-crossed lovers we are
    Destined to be driven apart
    When all we want is to be together
    A modern day Romeo and Juliet
    The love we have should be enough
    It doesn't matter what they say
    Our families completely torn in two
    And we suffer the consequence
    All because we love eachother
    Love isn't supposed to hurt like this
    It's not your fault and it's not mine
    We both know we belong together
    I love you enough to go to extremes
    I'll do anything to be with you
    There's got to be a way we can make it
    We've got to make everything right
    They tell us our love is so wrong
    But it feels so good inside
    Let's make a promise to eachother
    No matter what gets thrown our way
    No matter what stands in our path
    We'll never let anything ruin our love
    Some day we will rise above
    All the trouble we seemed to have caused

    Submitted on 2005-11-24 22:10:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      really does sound like tragic love. i can really feel how much you love this guy, and want make it work. i hope everything works out for you. nice job
    | Posted on 2005-11-25 00:00:00 | by onepieces | [ Reply to This ]

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