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    Author: tinkerbellsas
    ASL Info:    22/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 67/66/32
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 536
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 767



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    7,000 miles away
    You called
    I came running
    5,000 dollars or death
    You asked
    I came...money in hand
    When you've needed me
    I've been there
    A shoulder to cry on
    You used mine
    Someone to hug
    I embraced you
    The best of friends
    Until the end
    Sticking togther
    To fight the world
    I needed out
    I called
    You came running
    I just needed someone to love me
    I told you
    You came...heart on your sleeve
    You've been there
    When I've needed you
    We've always been together
    And we will always be
    You and me, me and you
    Nothing can come between
    A friendship so true




    Submitted on 2005-11-24 22:14:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I liked the short phrasing on this one. It read in a frantic almost pouring down rain kindofaway. If that makes any sense. And i agree with obaid, you should give this a title. something like = 7,000 miles away...

    The miles and money section in the beginning gave this a down and out story line, which was great, kinda wanted more of that. nice read

    cheers
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by childs | [ Reply to This ]
      nice relationship you've got goin with this special person. do give it a title. by the way, what did u mean by 'heart on your sleeve'
    | Posted on 2005-11-25 00:00:00 | by obaid | [ Reply to This ]


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