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Author: obaid
ASL Info:    21/M/Gauntlet
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Words: 103
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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inequality-hatred-jealousy
i just tried to write against these useless emotions
dedicated to two SPECIAL friends-RAIHAN and SHIHAN


Differences



So what if I'm different?
So what if I'm darker?
Its your pride that defines you-
Your pride makes YOU inferior!

You love to make classes
Mockin makes yoy happier.
You know that you'll be punished
But God you don't fear.

You scoff, you hate-you neglect us all
You look down on us- it's us you maul!
Handicap-you entitle us
You whisper at our backs.
You whip us to gushes(of blood)-
If for you we don't take off our hats?!

God says WE are equal
Born of the same parents WE are.
Brothers by blood-
YOU say: "Untouchables they are!"?




Submitted on 2005-11-25 00:02:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this poem is amazing. It really speaks out agains the people who don't like you (for whatever reason that may be...rascism, maybe?) but i think it's really good, to the point, and makes complete sense and i have to agree on it...
God says WE are equal
Born of the same parents WE are.
Brothers by blood-
YOU say: "Untouchables they are!"?

*darkwinged*
| Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by darkwinged | [ Reply to This ]
  I don't know If I am right, but i feel as though this poem is about racism. I loved it. Mainly because you are so right with the things you say. I feel sad after reading this... That's good though, because you were able to bring out my emotions.

Pinkfairy
| Posted on 2005-11-25 00:00:00 | by PinkFairy | [ Reply to This ]
  Lot of talk of god on this post board, I do like the idea that no-one is invunerable, and that the down-trodden will rise, in this world or the next. That is proven everday. But I would like to see the obvious rage of the poem condensed and clarified.
| Posted on 2005-11-25 00:00:00 | by Aruemos | [ Reply to This ]
  this is interesting. I mean you can interpurt this this in so many ways. To me this is a diffent rant but it's thoughtful none the less. Anyways i can't tell you if this is good or bad. But i think it's going somewhere. But at this state of mind i'm not really...great at commenting lol. But yea it makes me think.

~~Danni~~
| Posted on 2005-11-25 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]


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