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Always and foever.

Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 46
Class/Type: Misc /Love
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wrote this when i loved David i still do but...not so much.

Always and foever.

A million thoughts and words unsaid
A million voices in my head
A very climaxed sensation
a goal reacihng it's destinations
you me us together
sweet tales of us forever
very naive words
that make me leave
You'll leave me? never
our world...always and forever

Submitted on 2005-11-25 00:41:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  short and sweet. but big words and extravagant phrases couldn't have said it any better. in fact it woulda probly made it worse. this is a fave for me. cuz although it's simple, i can relate
| Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  I like the poem I have a few like it, next time double check spelling "reacihing"(I do that too)
And though pretty I don't know what you going for, A million thoughts, I seems that confusion, not resolve would be more of the priority at the end the sarcasm/irony is a bit muddled. overall I like it:)
| Posted on 2005-11-25 00:00:00 | by Aruemos | [ Reply to This ]
  Short and sweet. I like them this was you get your point across and thats what its all about right. Thanks for the read.
| Posted on 2005-11-25 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]

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