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    dots Submission Name: Within My Dreamsdots
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    Author: Metal Heart74
    Elite Ratio:    5.12 - 72/61/17
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       I just completely pulled this out of nowhere, I don't know why, the first verse came into my head, and the rest was like a dam that had been broken. I am really proud of this one. Enjoy!


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    dotsWithin My Dreamsdots
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    How is it effortless? I am totally free.
    falling for miles, no ground to be seen.

    Swimming comfortably,
    deep within the sea.
    The most beautiful woman,
    is attracted to me.

    Doorways that go
    to other worlds completely,
    with strange new people
    ready to greet me.

    The strange is normal,
    the normal is free.
    The inanimate alive
    with no blood to bleed.

    Within my dreams I am alone and free
    when I wake up the memory nowhere to be seen.
    I look forward to my next deep sleep,
    for within my dreams, I can truly be me.




    Submitted on 2005-11-25 13:34:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The strange is normal,
    the normal is free.
    The inanimate alive
    with no blood to bleed.

    the best part of a very good poem. thought for a few minutes about how to improve this, but really can't think of a way, it needs nothing i feel.

    i only wish it was longer, not because it needs to be, but because when you find a poem you enjoy and get into the flow of, you rarely want them to end.
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by Senna27NZ | [ Reply to This ]
      M- Like this one, too. You have changed a lot. Never thought you'd be writing and here you are writing like this. I like this poem. It's really good.
    | Posted on 2005-12-02 00:00:00 | by ImperfectGirl1 | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW! I think this is probably the best I've read of yours so far, but I just started, that could change. This was really good! You have every right to be proud of it. This was my favortie part: "The strange is normal,
    the normal is free.
    The inanimate alive
    with no blood to bleed." -> Love it! Can't wait to read more!

    Stefanie
    | Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by DeadValentine | [ Reply to This ]
      oh its sooo hard to flyy and so easy to falll, ans those up highhh fall soo muchh harderrr. sorry to be a downer, but im not in the bestest of moods at the moment. nice poem even if i cant share the happy spirits.
    | Posted on 2005-11-25 00:00:00 | by namesdontmatter | [ Reply to This ]


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