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    Author: poetry chica
    ASL Info:    17/f/usa
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 93/98/34
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Society
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       just thinking about how much emphasis we place on our weight nowadays...if you're healthy your fat and if you're sick and thin you look wonderful...it's just so f***ed up


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    what do we consider fat?
    if we can't see our bones?
    can't count our ribs?
    can't see our sholder blades jutting out of our back?

    to these people we say;
    you look great
    you look thin
    you look wonderful

    but what are we really thinking?
    you look sick
    you look drugged
    you look anorexic

    no we keep these thoughts hidden
    we try to fit in
    we go on diets
    we give into the pressure

    a regular pop is too much
    a diet is better
    a cheeseburger is a sin
    salads are our gods

    we starve ourselves
    and work out for hours
    as our body deteriorates
    and our wills our crushed




    Submitted on 2005-11-25 13:50:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      damn right preach it
    i hear you i way 145 pounds and im 5'7 but im stilll called fat
    it disturbes me deeply

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    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by bloodied_angel | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice write. I enjoyed it very much. I agree that society plasses people by the way they look. if they are skinny, they are beautiful, but if they are fat...they have problems. Keep up the good writing :) hope to read more
    | Posted on 2005-11-25 00:00:00 | by TwinkleToes | [ Reply to This ]
      It is a sad fact, but society shapes our lives. Your write strikes at the heart of lots of things. We all need to be who we are and being fat or thin it should not matter. A really good write.
    | Posted on 2005-11-25 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      I totally agree, but not all the skinny people in the world try to look the way they are. I'm skinny, but I eat like non-stop and I can't help but talk back when someone calls me anerexic when I'M NOT! Now, I'm not acussing you of anything, I completely think it's wrong when someone makes fun of someone who's "fat", as society calls them. It might be anything from an eating disorder to the fact that they might be way too stressed out! I really liked your poem, but just to let you know, not all of us skinny people are that way, I'm here for you. :-)
    | Posted on 2005-11-25 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]


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