too easy to fall -------------------------------------------
it is so hard to fly
and so easy to fall
and when youre up high
it hurts so much more'lucky for me
i was watching out below
i knew the groun was waiting to say i told you so
happiness has always been such a lovely illusion
calling forth and telling me to jump right in
but ive always showed some hesitation
and as i lay here on the ground
wondering why i even risked it
i guess its all to clear why i never did before now
hit the books, hit the bircks
figure out what i missed
because so many people seem to get it right
why cant i
i know im not the only one
and i wont be conceited enough to think i hurt worse
but it seems like it does at first
the falling is the best
effortless
and i cant say ive ever felt better
but the impact was enough to shake the smile off my face
Wow...i don't...wow...i realyl really like this, especially the last line. I really truly connect with this piece in many ways, and yet it is so different...i don't know how you do it, i really don't, wish i did, but no matter what you write, you take everything, words, structure, the way you put things...so originalyl done and so good. THis is the crappiest review i think i've written and i'm sorry i keep telling you the same things over and over again, but i can't help it, there really just isn't muich to ciriticize...oh, some grammatical/ spelling errors, is all i can think of for this piece...
thumbs up for creativity! I liked the begining lines they really grab you. I'm not really sure about the flow and I think there is suppose to be a D in ground.
Wow...this is definately getting added to my favorites. I have a song just like this, you should check out my song "the day my face met the sidewalk." It might not be saying the same thing, but it's still about falling from a cliff
Submission Name: too easy to fall
