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    dots Submission Name: too easy to falldots
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    Author: namesdontmatter
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/89/29
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 936
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       hmm could i be more of a nerd


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    dotstoo easy to falldots
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    it is so hard to fly
    and so easy to fall
    and when youre up high
    it hurts so much more'lucky for me
    i was watching out below
    i knew the groun was waiting to say i told you so
    happiness has always been such a lovely illusion
    calling forth and telling me to jump right in
    but ive always showed some hesitation
    and as i lay here on the ground
    wondering why i even risked it
    i guess its all to clear why i never did before now
    hit the books, hit the bircks
    figure out what i missed
    because so many people seem to get it right
    why cant i
    i know im not the only one
    and i wont be conceited enough to think i hurt worse
    but it seems like it does at first
    the falling is the best
    effortless
    and i cant say ive ever felt better
    but the impact was enough to shake the smile off my face




    Submitted on 2005-11-25 20:13:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow...i don't...wow...i realyl really like this, especially the last line. I really truly connect with this piece in many ways, and yet it is so different...i don't know how you do it, i really don't, wish i did, but no matter what you write, you take everything, words, structure, the way you put things...so originalyl done and so good. THis is the crappiest review i think i've written and i'm sorry i keep telling you the same things over and over again, but i can't help it, there really just isn't muich to ciriticize...oh, some grammatical/ spelling errors, is all i can think of for this piece...
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by Mercy December | [ Reply to This ]
      thumbs up for creativity!
    I liked the begining lines they really grab you.
    I'm not really sure about the flow and I think there is suppose to be a D in ground.

    great write

    llcollins
    | Posted on 2005-11-25 00:00:00 | by L.L.COLLINS | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow...this is definately getting added to my favorites. I have a song just like this, you should check out my song "the day my face met the sidewalk." It might not be saying the same thing, but it's still about falling from a cliff
    | Posted on 2005-11-25 00:00:00 | by vanhokinshtyl | [ Reply to This ]


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