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    dots Submission Name: Never Againdots

    Author: Jussy
    ASL Info:    21 ...guy....waterworld
    Elite Ratio:    4.47 - 66/64/21
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 796
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       This piece was about childhood abuse.
    whether it be sexuall, physical, or verbal.
    They are all wrong doings!

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    dotsNever Againdots

    I hate you in my head,
    running with a smile on.
    Sorry to disturb you now, but your time for tormenting is done.
    You thought you escaped in me but I'm here,
    right behind you.
    Turn around you coward man,
    come and face up to what you did.
    Broken hearts and broken dreams,
    even now your deception gleams.
    The time of judgment is here for you.
    Make no mistake of what
    I've come to do.

    Submitted on 2005-11-26 01:59:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was really good..there was a lot of emotion, pain and a taste for revenge here that seems long past due. sorry that your dad was like that...my friend's was the same way but he's like 35 now and hasn't talked to him in 10 years. This was really good though...I admire how easy this one appeared to be put out...hopefully someday I'll be able to write like this about my dad without the abuse thing but I mean how it pleased the reader and the writer. great write.
    | Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is nice, I have a poem similar to this one, it's the same topic i mean, but mines in more of a song structure, obviously, that's all that I know how to write
    | Posted on 2005-11-26 00:00:00 | by vanhokinshtyl | [ Reply to This ]

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