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    dots Submission Name: ~*~My perfect picture~*~dots
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    Author: _Dancing_Alone_
    ASL Info:    14/f/and...MARS.
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 91/96/36
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 236
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    dots~*~My perfect picture~*~dots
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    the sun outlined with light,
    but filled with black.
    the sky is painted gray,
    i cant tell if its night or day.
    but i love this feeling,anyway.

    my picture's painted perfect,
    though to someone else--my daydream feels,
    a nightmare.

    the clouds form one another
    but nonetheless feel plain.
    in this perfect world,my emotions are too drained.

    there's no such thing as perfect,
    so why do i keep yearning?
    to practice more & more.

    to getting in that picture,
    to just be.....painted on.




    Submitted on 2005-11-26 15:40:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It hat good imagery. I mean you described everything perfectly. I liked it. I can't really say anything negitive about it because to me it was good.

    ~~Danni~~
    | Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm, this was an interesting write, it had almost like an indifferent sound to it when I read it. I don't know why, lol, it just did. It might have been the first stanza, that was my favorite. In my opinion nothing at all distracted from this poem, nope, and nothing was unclear. This felt very original and I wouldn't have done anything diferently, great job!
    | Posted on 2005-11-26 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]



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