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    dots Submission Name: Mirror Mirror what do you hidedots
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    Author: smartblond
    ASL Info:    18/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 97/114/33
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Poetry/Mirror or Mask
    Total Views: 913
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsMirror Mirror what do you hidedots
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    Mirror mirror
    you do not lie
    you show only what is there

    As I look into my face
    I see what others see
    a tired and shabby me

    my hair is frazzled
    my face is pale
    my makeups smeared
    I look so frail

    There i stand a average girl
    living in this hateful world
    wondering why iím here

    what people see of me
    is what they judge
    without a second chance

    to take the time
    to look into my eyes
    just one single glance

    would show my heart and soul
    lurking beneath my mask
    burried deap inside me
    and all the secrets i may hide

    all this can be seen
    in just a single glance
    just a glance into my eyes
    look and you may be suprised




    Submitted on 2005-11-26 21:14:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Good poem. I liked it, and I agree with you, no one bothers to look at what's on the inside. It's always about the outside.
    I can relate. It's hard for me to make friends because of how I look to others. They see me as a dark, mean, and weird person, when actually I'm just the opposite. I hate that!
    Anwyays, great work, and the only spelling mistake I found was in the fourth stanza, first line. Where you said "there I stand a average girl" I'm not quite sure but I think your suppose to use 'an' rather than 'a'. Although, I really shouldn't be saying anything. I make spelling mistakes in just about every poem I write.

    ~Piper
    | Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]
      this was wierd. i liked it though. sometimes it's hard to see ourselves as we truly are and it can be a wake up call to see ourselves as others do. this was very good and i hope to read more
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      Awesome write. I loved it. It realtes to the poem "looking in the mirrior" that I wrote. I can relate to it very much. People always look on the outside, not whats on the inside :) keep it up
    | Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by TwinkleToes | [ Reply to This ]
      nice write...I liked the overall concept because it was easy to relate to...often times someone looks in the mirror and wishes it were deception but it's those who really believe it is that have a problem...but beauty comes in many forms and from your poetry I'm fairly sure ur a beautiful person. this was a good write and I enjoyed the read.
    peace
    | Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]


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