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Mirror Mirror what do you hide

Author: smartblond
ASL Info:    18/F/IL
Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 97 /114 /33
Words: 160
Class/Type: Poetry /Mirror or Mask
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Average Vote:    4.0000
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What do you think

Mirror Mirror what do you hide

Mirror mirror
you do not lie
you show only what is there

As I look into my face
I see what others see
a tired and shabby me

my hair is frazzled
my face is pale
my makeups smeared
I look so frail

There i stand a average girl
living in this hateful world
wondering why i’m here

what people see of me
is what they judge
without a second chance

to take the time
to look into my eyes
just one single glance

would show my heart and soul
lurking beneath my mask
burried deap inside me
and all the secrets i may hide

all this can be seen
in just a single glance
just a glance into my eyes
look and you may be suprised

Submitted on 2005-11-26 21:14:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Good poem. I liked it, and I agree with you, no one bothers to look at what's on the inside. It's always about the outside.
I can relate. It's hard for me to make friends because of how I look to others. They see me as a dark, mean, and weird person, when actually I'm just the opposite. I hate that!
Anwyays, great work, and the only spelling mistake I found was in the fourth stanza, first line. Where you said "there I stand a average girl" I'm not quite sure but I think your suppose to use 'an' rather than 'a'. Although, I really shouldn't be saying anything. I make spelling mistakes in just about every poem I write.

| Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]
  this was wierd. i liked it though. sometimes it's hard to see ourselves as we truly are and it can be a wake up call to see ourselves as others do. this was very good and i hope to read more
| Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  Awesome write. I loved it. It realtes to the poem "looking in the mirrior" that I wrote. I can relate to it very much. People always look on the outside, not whats on the inside :) keep it up
| Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by TwinkleToes | [ Reply to This ]
  nice write...I liked the overall concept because it was easy to relate to...often times someone looks in the mirror and wishes it were deception but it's those who really believe it is that have a problem...but beauty comes in many forms and from your poetry I'm fairly sure ur a beautiful person. this was a good write and I enjoyed the read.
| Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]

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