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    dots Submission Name: Heaven's Blessingdots
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    Author: Razorain
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 24/24/9
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/The pain inside
    Total Views: 164
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 702



    Description:
       The meaning of Heaven here is about that somewhere that claimed to be everyone's paradise but it's actually the opposite.


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    dotsHeaven's Blessingdots
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    Here I stood the blind
    There I was divine
    Air moved to rewind
    Stare I was not fine
    Glare the Eye off line
    Bare minded that time

    Winds bellowed
    Crimson fellow
    Gleamed black below
    Seemed blue the soul
    Lived I did but why?
    Breathed the air now died

    Where rules came to flip
    There I start to slip
    Mere I am in purpose
    Sheer pest I am the worst
    Infamy she came for me
    Insanity came to be

    Here then stood the blind
    There I was remind
    Care came off my mind
    Dare need not be fined
    Share selfishly mine
    Where none need to mind




    Submitted on 2005-11-26 21:44:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Paradise is in the eyes of the beholder... you made this very evident in this piece.
    I have a lot of respect for this particular style of writing mainly because I am not very gifted at noticing the darker side of life in a poetic mannor... I am jealous here!

    My favorite was stanza 3
    "Where rules came to flip
    There I start to slip
    Mere I am in purpose
    Sheer pest I am the worst
    Infamy she came for me
    Insanity came to be"

    To know your existance is merely worthless, your mind begins a jourvey into insanity. Your descriptions of this is remarkable

    Again, great write,

    Ella
    | Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by stormyskye | [ Reply to This ]



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