Description: This is just the start. I've had bad writers block for a while now, but I kinda forced myself into trying. Let me know if I should keep going with this!
That Feeling -------------------------------------------
You'd look deep into my eyes
Unlocking the beauty inside
I embrace your love
From that feeling, I no longer hide.
So powerful, it's over whelming
I can't get my mind around it
Amazing, and so wonderful
My heart can only flip.
Hiding from the truths
All that we could share
I hid, but my heart is now open
My feelings, I'm ready to bare.
I can't deny that feeling
Being hid for much too long
Not expressing in a simple poem
Or expressed in a lovely song.
That feeling I now embrace
With your love and your kiss
A simple yes, for all of it
To think what I would've missed.
I love your work! I'm still convinced you should be a lyricist. The poem reads well, but set to music I think it would be perfect. Call me biased but I swear its begging for a musical score. My favorite lines are:
"You'd look deep into my eyes Unlocking the beauty inside"
It reminded me of looking into the eyes of my sweetheart and feeling more beautiful because of what I saw in his eyes as I let him look into mine. At times the flow of the poem was not quite right. Perhaps I read it wrong. The feeling and mental image were without a doubt clear. I very much enjoyed reading your poem and look forward to reading the next.
i think you could go on with this piece although i have to agree with the other comment its nice just the way it is but i don't really like the ending of the poem it confused me at first but then when i read it a second time i got your point. the first two lines however were nicely written i'm not a fan of love poems but this one was a nice one. ++My Pain++