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    dots Submission Name: Some Kind of Lovedots

    Author: Nohbodyspoet
    ASL Info:    15/f/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 11/15/6
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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    dotsSome Kind of Lovedots

    Slipping through that space in time
    Swirling darkness 'round your mind
    Sucking life from which you breathe
    Speaking slowly, you whisper to me

    Falling quickly, the walls move in
    Flashing lights you scream again
    Flowing motion, can prevent
    Flying downward, can't circumvent

    Crashing to the wall of consciousness
    Craving light, it's hopelessness
    Climbing up to light behold
    Calling now, your hand I hold

    Come with me
    We'll go back
    Fall again
    Don't take it back

    Slipping slowly
    Falling in
    Divine light
    Come back again

    Driving me to some distress
    Dropping lines, your lies regress
    Diving into loves great pool
    Drowning now, you play the fool

    Playing choices, like cards decide
    Pressing toward me, you improvise
    Praying that you'll stay with me
    Passing out, with you I see

    Come with me
    We'll go back
    Fall again
    Don't take it back

    Slipping slowly
    Falling in
    Divine light
    Come back again

    Submitted on 2005-11-26 23:05:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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