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    dots Submission Name: my name's WEdots
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    Author: toyysruss
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 494/336/134
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsmy name's WEdots
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    changed,my mind has not
    the same,an original thought
    different,you have become
    the game,no one has one
    me,you try to be
    WE I say is me

    as life passes by,and even though WE try
    WE are not succesful.WE try to wrestle
    what is deep inside.many reasons WE die
    WE are all his children,and WE act as such
    and with saying all this,I dont think so much
    of the way WE act.the outcome,
    a true heartattack.that no asprin can defend
    a friend I cry to see.how ya doing?
    my name's WE

    my vision,I wish you'd come in
    a friend,I wish you'd defend
    a path,WE stray everyday
    a call,just want the chance to say
    hey,What's you're name today
    changed,keep up WE cannot
    changed,WE can't keep up with the thought
    the same,no use changing our name
    me,always have been
    WE







    Submitted on 2005-11-26 23:12:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the rhyming pattern in this was really neat. i liked the way the lines were broken making it seem like there was dual meaning at times.
    | Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by Casper | [ Reply to This ]


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