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    dots Submission Name: dont call i wont calldots

    Author: namesdontmatter
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/89/29
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       im so angry and i dont know if i should be or what and i just want to cry and its so stupid because other people have real problems and im whining over a stupid guy.

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    dotsdont call i wont calldots

    it hurts
    youre different now
    its different now
    and i think to myself howd it get this way
    i could handle it if id done something
    i could handle it if you hated me
    i cant stand the confusion
    the not knowing
    if youre avoiding me
    or you just cant get to the phone right now

    im afraid now
    i feel like im fading out
    the hope i had is slowly dying away
    i could handle it if id done something
    i cant handle to not knowing
    if youre just ignoring me
    or maybe you are just waiting for me to leave a message

    i wont
    i wont call anymore
    you know my number
    i wont let myself believe this is just a mistake
    because it was easy to hope after the first few calls
    but im batting a thousand
    and ive still got the phone in my hand

    Submitted on 2005-11-26 23:12:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't think your stupid, or that is stupid, some peopel can take it to a stupid level, but that's only some peopel. I like this because it kind of reminds me of my ex, and though this definately isn't one of your better pieces, it is still well written, and i stil like it. There are a couple of word problems you could fix like:

    i cant handle to not knowing

    I do like the ending, just a bang ending. Good write all around.
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by Mercy December | [ Reply to This ]

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