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    dots Submission Name: Pieces of the Jigsaw (Puzzle)dots
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    Author: divine chaos
    ASL Info:    16 f nsw australia
    Elite Ratio:    3.14 - 15/23/6
    Words: 292
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1605
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       i dont really know what its about, i started writing and this is what i came up with. i couldnt decide on "Pieces of the Puzzle" or "Pieces of the Jigsaw" tell me which one you think sounds better or fits with the words. also plz tell me what u think its about and what category you think it belongs in.
    thnx and enjoy.

    ok i think i know y i wrote this now. last week i went 2 c saw 2 and he said that the jigsaw represented that a vital piece was missing from rge person. I guess i wrote this with the notion of whats more vital in life than knowing who you are, faces are just faces unless you can put names 2 them


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    dotsPieces of the Jigsaw (Puzzle)dots
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    Pieces of the puzzle
    All scattered on the floor
    Knocked again from the table
    As they start to taunt you once more
    A tear drop from tomorrow
    A memory from today
    The pieces are few and far between
    And only add to your dismay

    Some pieces fit together
    Where as others seem so out of place
    A piece whoís edges are jagged and torn
    Sits next to its partner of lace
    A petal from a flower
    A lock of coal black hair
    Some pieces fall together
    But the puzzle still looks bare

    Four corners and a border
    But something still isnít there
    A picture isnít forming
    No matter how hard you stare
    A photo from a childhood
    A night light from a room
    The pieces begin to laugh again
    Locking you in their tomb

    Like a simple childrenís jigsaw
    This is more complex than you think
    The pieces are all haunting
    And drive you to the brink
    A necklace from a sweet heart
    A whisper from a lover
    Piece by piece you work it out
    But still you can not uncover

    After all is said and done
    After every piece has been placed
    All except the missing piece
    It is time for the truth to be faced
    A gap is left in your puzzle
    And a hole is left in your heart
    You answers will never fit
    But you knew that from the start

    The pieces have succeeded
    You can no longer heed their call
    Your were outwitted by a childís game
    This puzzle wont hang on your wall
    A letter from a loved one
    A deep and unfading scar
    Your memories are nothing
    If you canít remember who you are




    Submitted on 2005-11-27 00:58:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked it, it made me think of pie. but thats a good thing! but seriously, i liked the flow of the words, every line went hand in hand with the one befor it. its cool and original, i liked it. though i ask you if its just something you thought of, or something that you've been thinking of yourself"

    A letter from a loved one
    A deep and unfading scar
    Your memories are nothing
    If you canít remember who you are

    would this mean anything important to you?
    | Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by insphered soul | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is a decent piece. But why would you write if you did'nt even know what it's about? no offence or anything, maybe I'm just old fassioned. I tried to pick out a meaning but every time I did, the next line contridicted that.
    This has potential. Maybe figure out what "you"
    are trying to paint for us and it'd be better.
    Keep it up!
    | Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by Jussy | [ Reply to This ]


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