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    dots Submission Name: Bed Time Epiphanydots
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    Author: Jussy
    ASL Info:    21 ...guy....waterworld
    Elite Ratio:    4.47 - 66/64/21
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 975
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    Description:
       This is about my inside being worn and tired of everyday life. I think everyone can relate to wanting some sleep for their mind. Sleep is almost an escape for me sometimes. See what you can get out of it.


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    dotsBed Time Epiphanydots
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    It's one a.m.
    I'm half asleep. I pray my bed, my soul
    to keep.
    For when mourning comes,
    wake my body instead
    of my soul that longs for a comfortable bed.
    I get sick of waiting
    for the hourglass I'm dating,
    to let my broken body sleep
    because, unconscience,
    I no longer weep.




    Submitted on 2005-11-27 01:26:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The poem has some spelling errors which I do not care to point out. I liked the idea, that the mind is constantly working and when you wake, your mind screams in agony. It seems as though time is a weight and sleep is a means of procrastination.
    | Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by impassive sky | [ Reply to This ]
      sleep 4 da mind if my mind cant sleep ill go absolutly crazy
    i feel that way a lot
    thinking
    2 much thinking hurts
    just give up and let be

    nice poem
    i can relate

    Darkness of the Grim Draco
    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by darkness | [ Reply to This ]


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