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    dots Submission Name: Hein Sight Through Death's Eyedots

    Author: Jussy
    ASL Info:    21 ...guy....waterworld
    Elite Ratio:    4.47 - 66/64/21
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       This sonnet is about how from the time we are born into this world, society teaches all these false things that make our life to be hell and unnecesarily complicated.

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    dotsHein Sight Through Death's Eyedots

    As I'm floating from the earth,
    come memories of my child birth.
    When all was brightness in my eye,
    before society snuck in its lie.
    I think we all were different then,
    no notion of pain nor death or sin.
    But seeing now at what we become,
    From pain and writhing we never succomb.
    I had hoped we'd learn, and not be shy,
    to teach our children before we die,
    that time's what we make it,
    and life's what we believe.
    Please, someone tell them before
    we all leave.

    Submitted on 2005-11-27 01:35:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very well put
    I believe that parents our the right hand of the Lord
    Parents need to go back to the days when parents and the word love were hand in hand
    Society has broken down a lot of the work a parent needs to do to help make sure there children our given the god given write to enjoy life and live peacefully
    This write really made me think
    Great Job!

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    | Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      nice poem. i enjoyed how you made it clear that babies are more easier to be less affected and not knowing of sins. its a cool poem, i'd like to see another one like it. good luck and god bless!
    | Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by insphered soul | [ Reply to This ]

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