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Tragic Saturday Pt 2

Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
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Words: 108
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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yea i know it's been a while since anyone has read that poem. If you haven't read Tragic Saturday pt 1. Read that first then read this. Just so you'll get it. I don't think this one was as great as the first but hey it's hard to top the first poem. Anyways tell me your thoughts.

Tragic Saturday Pt 2

I wonder what would've happened
had i not shot myself
probally would've went
and shot somebody else

maybe my bastard father
who would rape me in my sleep
maybe even my mother
who turned the other cheek

was away his scent
every single night
nightmares haunted my dreams
of when i tried to fight

one day it got too hard
so when they went away
i made a real bad choice
i'm regretting to this day

i hated to make my friend watch
as i put the gun to my head
how the tears stain my face
but you guys know since i'm dead.

Submitted on 2005-11-27 12:45:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  suicide's lame but i still thought this one was pretty cool. life sux for this girl and i can see why she would do what she did. it's just hard to cope sometimes
| Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  *claps* I'm adding this sequel to my fav's. In my opinion I thought it was better than the first, lol. This was so powerful and filled with so much emotion it was almost unbearable! Great job!
| Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]

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