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Robin Hood Revolution

Author: Visionary
ASL Info:    15/male/NJ
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A little song i just wrote and am very proud of. Written to be a punk song, im hoping to put it to music soon with my band. Im just sick of the state of affairs. Comment on the political message, the flow, the rhymes anything. I know its a little tactless but what can you do, im angry.

Robin Hood Revolution

Robin Hood Revolution

Oh william, would you pass the caviar?
We’re out dear, one moment
“Oh smithers!!! More caviar on the double!”


I’m sick of your mansions, fine food and wine
When the poor of the world hardly get to dine
You could house a thousand in your 40 room castle
but they might stain your rug, what a fucking hastle
Your kids get a fine private education
But in the ghettos they get misinformation
You’re a slave to the cash and these fucking corporations
And you have the balls to preach about the state of the nation

Steal from the rich!
And give to poor!
No profit from pain anymore!

Imperialism so we can profit even more!
Turn our fellow man into a profit whore!
We broke free from England and their bullshit policies
But all over the world we have just as many colonies!
The US france and the UK
Are fighting over countries every other fucking day
We turn the sweat of the working class
Into cash for “secret” wars for gas


I don’t give a shit if you call me commie
Im sick of this dog eat dog Darwin economy!
You wonder why the poor are malcontent
Its cause you’ve got a summer house
And they can’t pay rent!
You all get happy when there’s a third world disaster
It’s a race to be the biggest “benefactor”
It’s like a fucking auction
And on their pain you bid


Or all those pretentious celebrities
With their gold teeth and eighty foot TVS
They talk about how the nations goin to hell
Because theres money to be made when you rebel


We need to start looking out for human kind
Be dedicated to each other, not a system of rules
Don’t say my dream is bullshit
At least I’m willing to try

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  i thought that was pretty kewl, and i was trying to place some music on it (i wanna hear it dude) ..maybe i shouldnt have been listening to The Postal Service while i was reading it.. but anyway.. you had some awesome thoughts here, like the first verse, which i'm guessing shows that some rich dudes servants have servants? and "The US france and the UK/ Are fighting over countries every other [censored] day" made me nod, and i really liked "Because theres money to be made when you rebel" is that not what every celeb does? i guess you understand that i really liked your thought process through this. it was realistic *not too negative, not overly happy* just realistic, the thoughts of most people on this earth.(cept maybe the ones really up there that dont care at all about anyone else)

i must disagree with "And you have the balls to preach about the state of the nation" though, cuz ppl are going to do that no matter what their social status.. (unless maybe if they ARE the president, or if they ARE responsible for the state of the nation, but anyway)

it was a good peice and i really liked it.. and when u've got some music w/ it i'd like to hear ^-^

kudos to you.
| Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by thehappyfaery | [ Reply to This ]
  Well, i will first say that i like it. I don't nessessarily agree, but i wish more people would stand up and say stuff like this. Technically speaking i think the chourus is a little overused, you could have dropped one rep of the chourus in the middle and combined two of the shorter sections inbetween.
| Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by gt4068 | [ Reply to This ]
  good reason that you're proud of this one. unlike the other comment, I completely do agree with this. I wrote something called "the invisible people" which is about that. but i shouldnt mention that, cause this is like. a million times better. lol.

"but they might stain your rug, what a [censored] hastle"
-that should be 'hassle' but thats the only typo i found, and the only flaw in this piece.

honestly. kick-ass. this is brilliant, and when you get it to music, i'd love to hear it.
| Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by Dimension_X | [ Reply to This ]
  Alot of things went through my mind as I read this..

The first being that it felt like life is like this more in the business world than anything else (and what doesn't envolve some business of some sort in the U.S., I just don't know)

it seemed a little negative to me and, please don't take this the wrong way, I disagree with quite a bit of this. but thats just my opinion.

yes, it is terrible that so many people of the world are starving. In fact 80% of the worlds goods goes to 20% of the richer countries. Its just wrong. But also take into mind all the good people are doing to solve these problems. There is food being sent, there are programs and schools being build. supplies administered.

Yes, there are people out there who take advantage of them and pocket the donated cash. But we would not truely be human without those types of people out there. Its terrible that they do it but its a fact of life and all we can do is just keep working to fix all of these problems.

I did like the comparison to Robin Hood. taking from the rich and giving to the poor.

interesting lyrics... really makes you think. Remember these are my opinions and mine alone...

good write

-mystmaker :)
| Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by MystMaker | [ Reply to This ]

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