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loves a perfect circle


Author: bloodied_angel
ASL Info:    15/Female/Oklahoma
Elite Ratio:    2.63 - 79 /119 /44
Words: 181
Class/Type: Rant /Love
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Average Vote:    1.0000
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just love ranting


loves a perfect circle



i dont know,
with out fail one of us is always busy
i dont know,
with out you i fail to breath
i dont know,
with out you i dont want to be
i dont know,
with out you there is no me

with out fail,
you will love me
with out fail,
your always there
with out fail,
i cry when you leave me
with out fail,
i always fall

you will love me,
till the end
you will love me,
till im dead
you will love me,
with out condition
you will love me,
and ill love you

till the end,
we will love
till the end,
we will be together
till the end,
we shall fight
till the end,
we'll always make it fine

we will love,
i dont know how long
we will love,
with out fail untill death
we will love,
you will love me as i love you
we will love,
till the end




Submitted on 2005-11-27 15:30:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I really like the repetition here. I wrote a poem once (on a completely different topic) in a similar style but I couldn't get it to work as well as you have here. Though the 'we always make it fine' is a little clumsy for me - you could just say, 'we'll be fine' or something. But on the whole, very nicely done
| Posted on 2006-03-17 00:00:00 | by herrbench | [ Reply to This ]
  i'm not one into love. i actualli don't even believe it realli exists. but...I think this could use some work, it confused me a little bit, and I didn't realli no what was realli being said...but just keep writing, you'll get better than you already are.
| Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by AngryAtTheWorld | [ Reply to This ]


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