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    dots Submission Name: i cutdots
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    Author: _Dancing_Alone_
    ASL Info:    14/f/and...MARS.
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 91/96/36
    Words: 204
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 969
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    Bytes: 1324



    Description:
       sorry it was so long......but if thats what it takes to get my thoughts out.......then o well!
    comment & tell me if u like it or if it needs changes or...w/e...


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    i cut,everytime i lose.
    i cut,all because i choose
    to go that low,evry'time i feel like im about to explode.

    i cut,
    when the feeling of saddness overpowers me.
    i cut,
    evry'time i feel too lonely.
    i cut,because it helps me deal.
    i cut,because it helps my fear.

    i dont make sence,what can you do?
    tell me to close my eyes & think of something new?

    i cut for me,not for you.
    i cut because i want to.
    i want to see my dream come true.

    happy,sad,good,bad-all of these thoughts
    just make me so mad.
    why cant i,just waste away?
    to throw away my longing,
    to see another day.
    --i cant find another way,its either this or go into the looney bin.
    & even if they lock me up,i'll still go insane
    & tear myself apart.

    so whats your dream?
    i've told you mine.
    does yours have,a sun that shines?
    or are you like me/
    with cuts on the wrist.
    someone who loves the cup half-empty,a pessimist.

    & if so,i'd like to know that im not so alone anymore.
    but if not,
    did you enjoy reading my thoughts?
    & if yes,i hope i made a difference.




    Submitted on 2005-11-27 16:06:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think it's a very honest, and truthful, poem but I also think it's a song waiting to happen, probably soft rock, lol. Anyway I thought it had a lot of cold logic, but not a whole ton of emotion, sorry, i guess I'm more of a flowery adjective guy, (even if that mean gory/bloody flowery adjectives) lol. On the whole, a good poem
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by lucianraven | [ Reply to This ]
      wow very much a truthful poem, the only problem i had with it was the setting out of it i like poems that have equal lenth in stanza's other then that the ryhming worked well with what you were describing and make me want ot read more, this one will defently be on my favs list, i'l take a look at your other work, nice job
    ++My Pain++
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by my pain | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey, this is good, I love how you reiterate "I cut" everytime, I haven't seen a poem like that in a while, if I've ever really seen one...you should check out my song "i made friends with something sharp, it's basically the same subject, but a little different...oh and you said you're poem was long, mine is really long
    | Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by vanhokinshtyl | [ Reply to This ]
      I hope that you don't cut and if you did you don't anymore (i use to do it.) Anyways this was good. I mean i liked it , it was long, but long enough. So keep up the good work.

    ~~Danni~~
    | Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this poem...It actualli made me cri, I guess because that's how I feel write now...I'm adding it to mi favorites. I'm speechless, really, I love it so much...
    | Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by AngryAtTheWorld | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought that this was a very good descriptive poem about why someone cuts, I hope that you don't really cut, but if you do then that's you, lol. Keep up the great work.
    | Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a poem i can relate to, mainly cuz i feel that way often..i only cut once or twice tho, cuz i figured it wasnt helpin.. im addin this to my favorites..keep writing, i love reading it
    | Posted on 2005-12-10 00:00:00 | by xvx_l3rokenn_x | [ Reply to This ]


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