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    dots Submission Name: If I Could Go Back To Back Thendots
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    Author: vanhokinshtyl
    ASL Info:    8/M/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 119/200/71
    Words: 226
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Lostfriend
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    Description:
       YOU CAN HEAR THIS (acoustic) AT www.myspace.com/complimentsorsarcasm (the singing is horrible though)

    This song is about a friend of mine who died on October 5th, ironically 2 days before my birthday. Oh yeah, and I have to give the Smashing Pumkins some credit, I reversed their line "Today is the greatest day I've ever know" from their song "Today," and made it my own, you'll see if you read the song...

    REST IN PEACE NICK REYNOLDS!!!


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    dotsIf I Could Go Back To Back Thendots
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    Today
    was the worst day
    I've ever known
    because I never realized that I
    took way too much for granted
    and now everything
    that I once had is gone

    Now the time goes by,
    it's wasting
    I mark the days off on my calender
    as they pass
    I think that living is a more
    difficult task
    now that you're gone

    I hate saying "Goodbye"
    so early in this short life,
    I can't remember much
    but parts of our severed memories

    This year
    was the worst year
    I've ever known
    because everybody tells me the
    same thing but I don't wanna hear
    "Get a life" and "Move on,"
    'cause you're not me
    and you don't know how it feels...

    To say "Goodbye"
    even thought it was
    the only thing that you could do,
    as we go from summer to fall-ing apart
    a friendship was lost on October 5th

    and now I
    can't take back everything I've ever said
    along with all my lingering regrets
    that I'll never forget
    every line of every song fed
    to your head
    I would be famished
    if I could go back to back then

    I hate saying "Goodbye"
    so early in this short life,
    I can't remember much
    but parts of our severed memories

    severed memories
    on October 5th




    Submitted on 2005-11-27 17:35:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      u know what..you just became like an idol for me..cus your writing is just so amazing! i don't know what else to say cus i suck on commenting...yeah..but your poems are just too great!

    kay
    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by Kay | [ Reply to This ]
      very sad but your words are very true.. and spirited to fit your sadness I loved
    the flow and construction.. reminded me
    of Nickle backs song Photograph.. all
    the memories we have and cherish
    this was really great.. never easy losing
    a friend..sorry for you loss

    hugs
    Penny
    | Posted on 2005-12-27 00:00:00 | by pennymarie | [ Reply to This ]
      Goodbye is the absolute hardest thing, hardest word, hardest concept to deal with. Whether someone is saying goodbye forever or just a short time or a long time..it doesn't matter, it still leaves you with an emptiness, a lonliness. Until someone feels it and lives it, they can never begin to understand. We all wish we could go back to then...but we can't...and maybe THAT'S the hardest thing to accept. Take care. ~hailie~
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]
      this really going into my fav's beacause I had an expirience just like this two weeks ago on a Friday. And I've lost a "friend" and she's out there somewhere smoking cigarettes and doing drugs. Well, this was an excellent write, keep it up!
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      Omg this is defintely going on my favs.
    I can relate in so many ways. My father died two months after his birthday... he died aug 13. Its pretty scarey just thinking about it. But every month passes.. I go there is 1 month, 2 months, 3 months, ect. But then I think is that what I should do, its not like you are counting down the days to a bday. Its counting the days someone you really loved is gone.
    I hate when I do that.
    Its hard to go through. I know now I am a little better. But tears still come down. Quite a bit. I mean I think it would be 10 times worse if he was around more. But half the day he was usually gone. Mornings he would go out for coffee... and nights he would go out too... So pretty much I was like even to talk to him... but as time past on the very ending, like a month before he died.. We spent more time together, and more time I really cherish.
    But I'm really sorry for your loss. I really no the feeling. If you ever need to talk, I'm here.
    I mean I never could here those words come out of my mouth. Until the day it happened, people were telling me that. Now I can help ppl too. Well at least try. Its hard. I still can hardly believe it. I always think hey hes gonna come home from work, go to the counter, put his keys down... and than whatever he normally does.. half the time I feel that way

    I really enjoyed this lyrics. They weren't complicated. But I really liked them. Because I really can relate.

    Keep writing
    Stephanie
    | Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      oh wow im really sorry.."as we go from summer to fall-ing apart" i know how that feels, and to be left at that when your friend leaves this earth must be horrid. im truly sorry that this happened to you.

    hugs and much love.
    | Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by thehappyfaery | [ Reply to This ]


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