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    dots Submission Name: forgetting about it;yea rightdots
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    Author: namesdontmatter
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/89/29
    Words: 222
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       such a melodrmamatic teenager oh no this cant be happening poem. im truly disgusted with myself.


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    dotsforgetting about it;yea rightdots
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    wake up
    put on some angry breakup music
    go brush my hair
    and pretend not to care
    get to school
    try to avoid running into you
    not talking at all if theres a chance youll hear
    when will we reach the point that this wont be too weird?

    get up, get out
    try not to think about it
    hope ill get over it somehow

    get home
    unplug the phone
    it probably wouldnt ring anyway
    everyone has run out of things to say
    to me
    about how theyre so freaking sorry
    but i dont ntoice them crying
    not that they notice i do either
    but thats different
    sort of
    lay down
    try to forget about you
    go to sleep only to wake again
    and have to go through another day

    get up, get out
    try not to think about it
    hope ill get over this somehow

    i wake up every morning
    i got to sleep every night
    you are always on my mind
    i always seem to want to cry
    people try to talk to me
    and tell me how im better off without you
    but if thats true
    why is it so hard just to

    get up, get out
    try not to think about you
    i really hope ill get over this soon






    Submitted on 2005-11-27 20:46:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ...damn it...your [censored] amazing. You take old played out teenage angst [censored], and not only give it a good name, you blow the roof off of the meaning of great poetry! I loved this, as jsut about everything of yours that i've read...i have nothing bad to say, sorry i can't really comment and can only praise. Keep writing!
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by Mercy December | [ Reply to This ]
      this is more like lyrics I'd say, I mean I can picture a song to go with this. But anyways, I love the ending,

    "people try to talk to me
    and tell me how im better off without you
    but if thats true
    why is it so hard just to

    get up, get out
    try not to think about you
    i really hope ill get over this soon"

    you're saying "why's it so hard to get up..." it's so slick how you run it into another stanza, and change the words from the last two and end it...good job...(slick is my favorite word, sorry if it sounds unprofessional lol)

    keep em comin

    codee
    | Posted on 2005-11-27 00:00:00 | by vanhokinshtyl | [ Reply to This ]


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