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    dots Submission Name: To Joeydots
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    Author: Jussy
    ASL Info:    21 ...guy....waterworld
    Elite Ratio:    4.47 - 66/64/21
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 865
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    Bytes: 573



    Description:
       I lost a friend to drugs and I almost got put away too. I cleaned up and he did'nt, and he got jail for 8 years. This is my lament to him.


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    Closing your eyes, head rush from the pipe,
    watching your dreams shoot stars in the skys.
    The mourning comes, your head's undone.
    You'll quickly scramble money, buy your escape,
    So your heart won't bust.
    I've seen you abuse your body
    more than the sun can say its age.
    I just sit and let you puff your life away.
    What kind of person am I?
    To watch you take in, day by day,
    the buzz that ruined your life.
    In a cell now, your dreams are laid
    to rest.
    Forgive me.




    Submitted on 2005-11-27 22:35:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      sad, the regret of watching your friends life go down the drain, yet you couldnt do anything.
    drugs is nasty stuff, it ruins more then one life at a time.
    sometimes you wish you could go back, change it all, do it all right.

    it makes me wonder, is there something I could have done?
    more then once I have a troubled friend go down the wrong road.

    you did a good job on this, simple. yet it painted the picture & made me think.
    it made me see where you stood & how you felt.
    good job
    take care
    ~jennifer
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]


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