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    dots Submission Name: Heart's Delidots
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    Author: Jussy
    ASL Info:    21 ...guy....waterworld
    Elite Ratio:    4.47 - 66/64/21
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       This is about how my girlfriend's family use her as a slave rather than a family member.


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    dotsHeart's Delidots
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    Deciding from the whispers your eyes tell me,
    You're inviting everyone to your heart's deli.
    There, they can find a really good deal,
    on the layers of heart, you're letting them peal.
    I swear by my name, I'll help get you out.
    Exploiting your heart, isn't what love's about.
    I'm not meaning to make enemies or tell you
    what to do.
    My irratation and my vexation are because
    I love you.
    So when your heart's deli finally wraps up,
    run back to me and I'll fill your cup.




    Submitted on 2005-11-27 22:40:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      the wording on this poem is quite natural and the rhymes are not forced , but thought and presented in quite a casual manner , you would not even notice that the words are rhyming unless you looked quite closely at the poem .W loose chick is the subject of the poem , correct me if im wrong and the voice of the poem is in love with her and whats to show her what true love is.What a nice twist in the poem.this is the kind of stuff that movies are made of
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by tinashe | [ Reply to This ]


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