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    dots Submission Name: He used itdots

    Author: aprilrenee101
    ASL Info:    24/F/GR
    Elite Ratio:    3.14 - 36/25/6
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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       This is true, hopefully pretty straight foward and what I was thinking at the time. THis happened alittle over six years ago, when the poem was written. I edited it so......check it out.

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    dotsHe used itdots

    He used it,
    He was soaked, looking for another way.
    He didnt find it.
    Why was it done?
    Why was it there?
    Closing to an end when yet he could have lived.

    The colors were black and white,
    nothing mattered....
    He choose to die instead of live.

    Across the other side,
    people heard, never listened....
    and then asked why
    while now he just sleeps forever
    and now we just listen,
    as he can never answer why.

    Submitted on 2005-11-28 00:10:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, alot of my friends are sucidal, and im one of the few people that try to help them, i wish some people would listen while they are hearing. over all, i got the just of the poem, but it took some time to decifer what it was saing. but over all, good job
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by morriscool4 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really powerful stuff here. My husband's adopted father commited suicide when he was a child, and all that's left are so many questions and life long wondering.
    This is a great write, I really enjoyed how it had a confused, almost hopeless air to it.
    Traci :)
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by onetruesmartass | [ Reply to This ]
      This is sad...It hurts my heart to read. I liked the emotion, but the varying structure threw me off. What do you mean by "He Used It"? Thats confusing for me to, but I'm also not the sharpest tool in the shed. Keep it up!

    <3 Adalae
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by lifeNsoul1224 | [ Reply to This ]

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