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it takes blind eyes to see

Author: bloodied_angel
ASL Info:    15/Female/Oklahoma
Elite Ratio:    2.63 - 79 /119 /44
Words: 94
Class/Type: Rant /Depressed
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im developing a habbit of rambling

it takes blind eyes to see

to be is to be seen
to see is to never been blind
to never be blind means your never vulrable
if your never vulnrable then your not human

to die is to not be seen
to not be seen is to be blind
to be blind is to be vulnrable
if your vulnrable then your just like me

quite tears that no one sees
muffled screams that every one ignores
i am here but you cant see
your to scared to open yourself to me

Submitted on 2005-11-28 09:43:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Its cool! i got a bit toungue tied sometimes and rumbling is not always a bad thing think possitive this is a good poem. the only thing i would change is the title(they are the hardess thing to come up with in my case)
| Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by Brat05 | [ Reply to This ]
  This was really good. I like the way you just ranted. It fell into place real well. Its really different, I would have never thought of anything like this. I thought is was so neat.

| Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by dreamer37517 | [ Reply to This ]
  sounds like my life...
i agree with auntwheezie, you do need to watch the grammer. it's a wonderfull piece but it gets lost in all the grammatical errors. but hey, keep writing.
| Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by secretdream0 | [ Reply to This ]
  This was quite a good poem I thoroughly enjoyed it. there are some spelling and grammatical errors that need to be fixed up and once that happens I believe it will really showcase a good piece of poetry.
| Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by auntwheezie | [ Reply to This ]

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