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    dots Submission Name: it takes blind eyes to seedots
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    Author: bloodied_angel
    ASL Info:    15/Female/Oklahoma
    Elite Ratio:    2.63 - 79/119/44
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
    Total Views: 776
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 496



    Description:
       again.......
    im developing a habbit of rambling


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    dotsit takes blind eyes to seedots
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    to be is to be seen
    to see is to never been blind
    to never be blind means your never vulrable
    if your never vulnrable then your not human

    to die is to not be seen
    to not be seen is to be blind
    to be blind is to be vulnrable
    if your vulnrable then your just like me

    quite tears that no one sees
    muffled screams that every one ignores
    i am here but you cant see
    your to scared to open yourself to me




    Submitted on 2005-11-28 09:43:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Its cool! i got a bit toungue tied sometimes and rumbling is not always a bad thing think possitive this is a good poem. the only thing i would change is the title(they are the hardess thing to come up with in my case)
    | Posted on 2005-12-05 00:00:00 | by Brat05 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really good. I like the way you just ranted. It fell into place real well. Its really different, I would have never thought of anything like this. I thought is was so neat.

    Meg
    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by dreamer37517 | [ Reply to This ]
      sounds like my life...
    i agree with auntwheezie, you do need to watch the grammer. it's a wonderfull piece but it gets lost in all the grammatical errors. but hey, keep writing.
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by secretdream0 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was quite a good poem I thoroughly enjoyed it. there are some spelling and grammatical errors that need to be fixed up and once that happens I believe it will really showcase a good piece of poetry.
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by auntwheezie | [ Reply to This ]


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