[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: New Daydots

    Author: roxygirl
    ASL Info:    17/F/USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.18 - 34/36/9
    Words: 15
    Class/Type: Haiku/Nature
    Total Views: 798
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 87


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsNew Daydots

    Wind in the willows
    Early in the morning light
    A new day has come

    Submitted on 2005-11-28 09:47:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      decent, but not nearly great. The imagery is good, but it doesn't paint some sort of clear picture, and there's not a lot of content put into it, like in some haiku's.
    | Posted on 2005-12-03 00:00:00 | by hybridsongwrite | [ Reply to This ]
      Great work. I like how it is short and to the point. I've never written a haiku poem before. I think it would be fun to try.

    God Bless,

    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]
      Awwww this is so sweet! Especially because it made reference to the weeping willow which is like the most pimp of the pimp. lol.
    I like both of your haikus you've got a talent when it comes to them (I can't write them to save my life)
    Keep Writing and I'll Keep Reading
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]
      This is another very good haiku you have written. This one is correct in all aspects of the traditional haiku. Your format is very good and your topic is lovely. The imagery here is also very good as you have given me some lovely images in my mind of the beginning of a new day and all the hope that it brings with its arrival. A very good haiku. Nicely done. Take care.

    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      A very lovely and refreshing image you've painted here in words. A New Day.. such promise in that. A new start, etc.
    I love the thought of the wind sweeping through the willows in the early morning.
    Nice Haiku..
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]