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    dots Submission Name: Grey Sky And A Messed Up Daydots
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    Author: Tarek Refaat
    ASL Info:    24/m/Egypt
    Elite Ratio:    2.66 - 370/508/212
    Words: 270
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Grey Sky And A messed up Day

    Grey sky is all I can see
    Grey sky is whatís before me
    Grey sky is what I try to dig
    To dig deep inside of me

    I walk down the streets to go home
    And I feel choked and all alone

    Not knowing if I want to go
    Stay there or die alone

    Grey sky with smoke in the air
    The burning fires of my past
    Burning deep within me in despair

    I take a deep breath
    As if it will solve anything
    I try to shake away the feelings of loneliness

    But it is stuck like a needle through my arm
    Whenever I move I feel the pain
    That reminds me it is there
    Perhaps there to stay

    No wind
    No rain
    Only blood
    And pain
    Only a past full of stains
    Only nightmares of shame

    Grey sky above me all the way
    I have nothing more to say
    But one question to ask.
    Well the blue sky break out one day?

    Such a piece of crap life can be
    When everyone sees the good inside of me
    And I canít even find a lamp to light
    The heart inside of me
    And be just simply who I want to be

    I think to myself
    Your grey day has come
    So just shut up and die
    And lay dead and numb
    And wait till it passes by
    Maybe one day youíll come to life

    This is just me on a gloomy yesterday
    A grey sky and a messed up day




    Submitted on 2005-11-28 09:52:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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