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even saints are sinners


Author: dismentled
ASL Info:    26/M/"South of Heaven"
Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 625 /583 /217
Words: 146
Class/Type: Poetry /Gothic
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even saints are sinners



dark angels
hovering my head
as my demons
try to set me free
such a lovely day
sky's raining blood
so refreshing
just can't enough

fore i am guilty
and i admit it
isn' that more,
than i can say for you?

tired of dying!
tired of trying!
leaving me in
my failures again!
when you
suceed at failing
precicly what
happens in the end?

dead bodies
lying everywhere
blood is falling
from heaven above
from the angels
of no mercy
for the poor
depraved and wicked soul!

hate
lust
agony
mistrust
everything
that
makes the
world go 'round

but we're drowning
in the blood
of the guilty
from the angels above
there's no hope now
blood on heavens gate
the angels take my hand
my demons release me
as i'm welcomed
through the ninth gate
fore the last time




Submitted on 2005-11-28 13:13:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i like it i hate society thats why i spend most my time on the computer
i like your poem lots pease read some of my stuff
| Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by bloodied_angel | [ Reply to This ]
  I think this was ok...the repitition of 'raining blood' got old real fast, so you might want to mix it up abit on that, but other than that i liked the concept.


~Kane~
| Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by Kane Martyr | [ Reply to This ]
  I like and hate it at the same time so I'll have to think more about that but it is very interesting but there is great sorrow and alot of blood so I don't know
| Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by Animus Custodis | [ Reply to This ]
  this was sweet...well as in cool. i really liked it and it was smooth and deep. this would make a really cool song and i just like the way its spoken. you should keep writing like this. i really like this and i should come back and see some stuff you put up.
-BleedingTears
| Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]


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