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    dots Submission Name: even saints are sinnersdots
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    Author: dismentled
    ASL Info:    26/M/"South of Heaven"
    Elite Ratio:    4.06 - 625/583/217
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Gothic
    Total Views: 860
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    dotseven saints are sinnersdots
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    dark angels
    hovering my head
    as my demons
    try to set me free
    such a lovely day
    sky's raining blood
    so refreshing
    just can't enough

    fore i am guilty
    and i admit it
    isn' that more,
    than i can say for you?

    tired of dying!
    tired of trying!
    leaving me in
    my failures again!
    when you
    suceed at failing
    precicly what
    happens in the end?

    dead bodies
    lying everywhere
    blood is falling
    from heaven above
    from the angels
    of no mercy
    for the poor
    depraved and wicked soul!

    hate
    lust
    agony
    mistrust
    everything
    that
    makes the
    world go 'round

    but we're drowning
    in the blood
    of the guilty
    from the angels above
    there's no hope now
    blood on heavens gate
    the angels take my hand
    my demons release me
    as i'm welcomed
    through the ninth gate
    fore the last time




    Submitted on 2005-11-28 13:13:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i like it i hate society thats why i spend most my time on the computer
    i like your poem lots pease read some of my stuff
    | Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by bloodied_angel | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this was ok...the repitition of 'raining blood' got old real fast, so you might want to mix it up abit on that, but other than that i liked the concept.


    ~Kane~
    | Posted on 2005-12-01 00:00:00 | by Kane Martyr | [ Reply to This ]
      I like and hate it at the same time so I'll have to think more about that but it is very interesting but there is great sorrow and alot of blood so I don't know
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by Animus Custodis | [ Reply to This ]
      this was sweet...well as in cool. i really liked it and it was smooth and deep. this would make a really cool song and i just like the way its spoken. you should keep writing like this. i really like this and i should come back and see some stuff you put up.
    -BleedingTears
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]


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