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    dots Submission Name: GIVE"in"g THANKSdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Prose/Nature
    Total Views: 613
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    Description:
       Driving through the Sierra Nevada mountains on my way to Reno, NV - one mountain peak looked as though "IT" was an indian chief laying on his back arms stretched upward in thanks and the trees and such his headress - across the way another smaller mountain peak that looked like a hibernating bear.

    Thankful for nature

    Love,Peace,Joy ~ Know,Experience,BE!
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    Contemplating Chief
    in conference
    Celestial
    At One with
    Earth
    Embracing Eternal
    Thanking Divine

    A flowing headress
    Fall
    cascading down
    Sierra
    nestling sleeping
    bear mountain
    Leaving the bare
    Forest
    a dream of technicolor
    Spring

    The cocoon yesterday
    chrysallis Now
    breath of Life
    Sweet exhale
    SOUL




    Submitted on 2005-11-28 13:38:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The beautiful mountains of fall is some of the prettiest colors. One has surely missed out if they haven't gotten to witness this.
    Your poem describes and brings it out in such a way that the reader is able to see the picture of it all in their mind. Very well written, Epaphiny!

    Joyful memories of the mountains,,,
    ~Linda
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very good poem. Filled with wonderful imagery and very descriptive so that I feel like I could visualize these beautiful mountains that you were so fortunate to enjoy. They truly sound remarkable and obviously so as they inspired this lovely nature poem. I have always found it fascinating how you can see different things in the landscape like for instance, in New England we have a spot called the "old man in the mountain" and you can actually see his face and it is all purely natural in its occurance from erosion and such. It is really amazing. This is a lovely poem! And your words give the reader a nice soothing feeling as this poem is read. Beautiful. Take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      "a dream of technicolor
    Spring"

    that's a great line. love the images of freedom that roar in this poem. Desert, Driving, Reno... I'm jealous.

    :)
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by childs | [ Reply to This ]
      Umpa umpa - big chief wears a jumper
    To keep his belly warm way up the hill
    Headress feathered well my rooster - he has fell
    Plucked to the bone - he now has caught a chill.

    I liked your poem as well !
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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