Description: this is simple to express. as soon as i can go home and get my guitar i well pour out all of my emotion into it. then after i am exsoted i well "feel" better. hehe
thanks oh and the guitar is not the muse i was refering to. even though it is greatly a passion and hunger and even life.
the muse -------------------------------------------
i am trying not to make a mistake.
my heart feel broken. or at lest its lost part of its joy.
i have found a replacment for it but it is merly a muse for the moment.
so i have deciding to drop the muse and be content in working to teach my mind how to be gental and confert my heart.
between the two: the muse and the choice, the choice is the harder of the two yet in the end well be the most benifical.
hello Felicia. this speaks wonderful truth and you have very lovely words here. now I will have to fix a few things here. I’m going to do this he shorter way. first ill list the words that need to be fixed: “replacment, merly, gental, confert, benifical.” also I took the liberty of trying to brush up on the structure of the write perhaps you might like it better.
i am trying not to make a mistake. my heart feel(s) broken. or at lest its lost part of its joy. i have found a replacement for it but it is merely a muse for the moment. so i have deciding to drop the muse and be content in working to teach my mind how to be gentle and confer (with) my heart. between the two: the muse and the choice, the choice is the harder of the two yet in the end well be the most beneficial.
I only took a wild guess on the word “confer” but it may also be “comfort” in that case drop the suggestion “with” very strong feelings and I do love the references of the muse and the choice. take care ,
Fel-Fel-Fel-Feliciaaaaaaaaaa! What a freakin powerful statement! Honest and heartfelt. I think this is one of the best things I have ever read from you. I think that last line is just grrrrrr8! Choices are harder and thats the God awful beauty of them. Hee-hee!
I agree that there are a lot of misspellings and grammatical errors. I know people say it doesn't matter, but it does make it seem like a poet doesn't care. It's also harder to understand a work with misspellings and poor grammar. However, I don't think poetry has to have "structure" (since I write free verse); a poem can be devoid of meter and rhyme and be as good as anything traditional. Anyway, I do think this needs work, Amy
First of all, this piece is riddled with grammatical errors. It doesn't seem as if you've put much work into this. If you were trying to structure this as a poem, I don't see anything resembling structure. This could, with a good deal of work, become a beautiful piece of poetry. The idea definitely has potential, but the actual writing definitely needs work.
I understand what you were saying W e all find something or someone to help us along in our bJourney here on earth Be them a friend a soulmate God Or maybe even a favorite book We all need something This is the emotion and the feeling I got from this write Take Care Ron And thanks again for commenting on my Poetry I will definately be looking for more writes of yours God Bless Ron