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    dots Submission Name: Black and Whitedots
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    Author: Dimension_X
    ASL Info:    17/F/NJ
    Elite Ratio:    5.39 - 124/108/70
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 1335
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 874



    Description:
       well, really it's black and white. [pun intended] oh boy. anyway. Sometimes years thinking of only one person can build up on you. and that's where this came from. Generally saying that nothing can really erase memories, no matter how hard you want to believe they can. Somethings can only put off the thoughts that you don't want to think about. Well, thats kinda where i wanted this piece to go. I think I might have lost that. alright. im wasting your time. read on!



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    I can erase words with such ease. I just wish it were the same with memories. If that were true, I can guarantee you, I wouldn’t be able to write this any longer. There’d be no heartache to dwell over.

    You’d be dust; flying, drifting away. I just wish it were the same with memories. Cause then I woudn't have these tear-stained pillow cases, and there wouldn’t be any cause to keep renting all those black and white films to get my mind off…

    what was it again? That thing I’m trying so hard to forget? Something dealing with letters and slamming doors, and someone, gone forever. It doesn’t matter to me anymore.

    A couple more oldies, restless nights coupled with some bottles of that hard stuff and I’m sure I’ll be doing just fine. And I’m thinking, maybe then, my words will be true.





    Submitted on 2005-11-28 16:08:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Omg I really enjoyed this piece. It just reminds me of me. Of course when everyone reads this, they will say, "yeah I can relate". Which is good.
    I mean I regret alot of things, most of them "yes" memories. But the thing is most of the time I screwd up on my own. Sometimes I just want them "yes" to all escape from me... So I don't have to think or worry about them any longer. I want to stop with the what if's.

    Anyways I really enjoyed this. I'm gonna add this one to my favs.

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    Stephanie
    | Posted on 2005-11-30 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is a good write and it is something that alot of people can relate to - the sad story of the unreturned love - of dragging on forever and a day thinking of him/her and wondering what if. oh man i know i can relate to this and it truely makes you think - (in my case its a he) is HE truely worth it all these tears im sheding for him the nights i am spending alone because he broke our plans or wont return a call - the constant keeping you dangaling on a string like a puppet - its so sad how we can let our saddened emotions sometimes get the best of us! Thank you for makeing me think keep up the great writting ...

    Thirst_4_serenity
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by Thirst4Serenity | [ Reply to This ]


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