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    dots Submission Name: Glue!dots
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    Author: Lana Jay
    Elite Ratio:    1.99 - 3/7/6
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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       I was Bored... And there was Glue... And I wrote about it... Lol


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    dotsGlue!dots
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    there’s glue on my right
    there glue on my left
    There’s glue everywhere...
    and its even on my chest
    Or drawers that is
    Elmer’s glue
    how i love you
    you stick to me
    and i stick to you
    my fingers get bonded
    by your mighty stickiness
    and I love you because of your icky ness
    I could play with you all day
    But then you would go away
    I’d have no more you
    Except on my skin,
    where there is glue
    At first your wet and sticky
    Then dry and flakey
    You perfect in almost every way
    Except that you can go away




    Submitted on 2005-11-28 17:12:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hmm... wow glue kicks serious ass - at least in your book... I love comedic poetry, gives one a break from all that depressing crap that is out there... the loose rhyming really served to hold it all together, otherwise i might have been lost after the first line about glue... but your imagery was just great, makes me want to find my own bottle of glue... Awesome... PEACE and LOVE, Greg
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by geherald | [ Reply to This ]


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