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    dots Submission Name: OutLandish Fairytaledots
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    Author: Lana Jay
    Elite Ratio:    1.99 - 3/7/6
    Words: 453
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
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       I wrote this in 8th grade... Yea.. It shows... Lol


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    dotsOutLandish Fairytaledots
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    This may sound conspicuous
    And a little alarming
    This tale is of a boy,
    His name, Prince Charming

    He was skipping through the woods
    As happy as can be
    When he tripped upon a log
    And hurt his little knee

    He rose to his feet
    And soon he realized
    His knee was alright
    Much to his surprise

    He walked a little further
    Until he couldn’t see
    The forest had become dark
    Then he walked into a tree

    He soon fell asleep
    And when he awoke
    He was covered and warmed
    By a little red cloak

    It came from the left pocket
    And rested on the ground
    A small little note
    That he had found

    He opened it up
    And read it a loud
    Like people were watching
    Like in a crowd

    “Dear kind sir, I see
    You’ve lost your way
    But a warning to you
    I must have to say

    A wolf is about
    He is looking for me
    So be careful where
    You step red riding..”

    He was rudely interrupted
    When the wolf let out a roar
    He must be after her
    But where and what for

    He ran real fast
    A cabin was near
    A loud boisterous yell
    From inside he could here
    She ran out,
    As he ran in
    He saw the hideous beast
    And slain him right then

    The girl walked in
    Sad and teary
    The wolf ate her grandmother
    Poor grandma Leery

    Charming grabbed an axe
    From behind the bed
    He swung the mighty weapon
    Into the wolf’s head

    He walked out the door
    Knowing nothing could be done
    “Little girl” he said “it’s over
    The wolf has won”

    Back into the forest
    He ran and he ran
    Away from the hut
    To become a new man

    Back into the shadows
    Of the gloomy forest
    Reminded of the cabin
    And grandma Leery Morest

    Seven little dwarfs
    He soon came upon
    They protected a beauty
    A sleeping young blond

    They jumped and shouted
    And screamed “GO AWAY
    THERES THE RGHT PATH
    AND DON’T YOU DARE STRAY”

    The wicked witch is coming
    She’s coming from the east
    But when she arrives
    She’ll become his feast

    She had arrived
    Just as she was told
    She passed charming
    This witch was bold

    She flew at Charming
    Not going to stop
    She hit the poor man
    All he did was drop

    Prince Charming is dead
    His soul floats on
    And the witch keeps his body
    It’s her bloody pawn

    So before you go off
    On an outlandish quest
    Be safe, Be careful
    Or you’re the witches new guest.




    Submitted on 2005-11-28 17:14:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      unlike caspian, i was not really confused... i love the way you turned common fair tales into something more with your poetic story, it really makes one wonder what is going to happen next... the moral twist at the end was great too, tying in all the previous events and creating a comedic morality view... PEACE and LOVE, Greg
    | Posted on 2005-11-29 00:00:00 | by geherald | [ Reply to This ]
      i was quite confused while i read your poem, until you revealed the moral in the end, but still i dont really get it...it seems like your trying to say that life is like a fairytail where we are the characters...anyway, i liked the way your words rimed and the whole structure of it...
    | Posted on 2005-11-28 00:00:00 | by caspian | [ Reply to This ]


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